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This article is about how uneasy it was to travel from Melbourne to Sydney and the other way round.
The writer, Clive Dorman, shared his experience of leaving home at 5:20am to be an hour early for the 7:45am flight from Melbourne to Sydney. However, he hit two traffic jams on freeway, then the courtesy bus at the airport delayed, the self check-in kiosk couldn't read his ticket, the flight was close when he was still in the time-consuming queue. He somehow got on another flight but then the flight was slowed down when it was approaching Sydney because of “high winds”, leaving him only 10 minutes to catch his onward flight.
Clive’s flight from Sydney back to Melbourne was not much better.
Clive started off his article with Bob Dylan’s decision of jumping from a folk song singer to a musician. However, neither Bob Dylan nor his switching to a musician was related to the article. The reason for mentioning Bob Dylan was merely to bring out his song, Everything is Broken, which he thought of when he was stuck up by Australian’s busiest air route. Clive could have simply mentioned the name of the song.
Clive used a rather special approach to express how uneasy his ride from Melbourne to Sydney (and vice versa) was. Instead of writing in paragraphs, complaining what happened, he listed out the time and incidents so that readers can judge by themselves.
However, this approach made his article like a log book which is rather boring to read. Readers are not interested in knowing at exactly what time he was on a highway or on the plane. He could have added some of his personal feelings instead of merely listing out what happened.
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